3:52 nagata
- ってな感じで校了した原稿から註を抜いた暫定案を作ってみたんだぜ。
Under the status quo, many minors have cellar phones. According to the research by Cabinet office, 96.4% (ninety-six point four) of Japanese minors have their own cellar phone. Judging from this, we can say that cellar phones are playing an important and irreplaceable role in minors’ daily life. So we strongly believe that today's plan will cause a really bad change for minors.
Our team stance is that minors should be informed of the correct way of using cell phones by education and it must lead to protecting them and enriching their life.
So I refute back to what previous speaker said under this stance.
Next, let me reconstruct our points.
Our first point is about safety of minors.
As my partner said, more & more crimes and accidents involving minors are occurring under the status quo. Children are very small and weak, and don’t have good insight into society because of lacking of experiment. So they can’t protect themselves as well as adults.
Nowadays many minors go to cram school or private lesson and practice in club activity, so they go home late at night. It's dangerous situation because, as you know, few people walk on the street at night. So they should have cell phones and carry it because cell phones have very useful function to protect minors. It is GPS, the system calculating a person' location by using satellite. So minors can locate themselves and their parents can also find where they are. It leads to solving accidents and crimes. I have an evidence to support this point.
According to MSN industry and economic News, in March, 2008(two thousand eight), five elementary school students got lost in Mt.Tikuha, and by using GPS they could be rescued within about two hours and a half.
This is how GPS can rescue minors. Even if minors are kidnapped, GPS tells us where they are, and it leads to early settlement.
In addition, many cell phones have crime prevention buzzer. If a child go home at night and is attacked by pervert,buzzer's big sound can repulse him.
And in addition to GPS, the function of calling is also useful to protect minors because they can ask help by calling. I have an evidence to support this point.
According to the Mainitci News paper, when 16 old girl was kidnapped at night, she asked her mother to help by calling and she was rescued safely.
Our second point is about communication.
As you know, cellar phones’ main function is calling and sending e-mails. Especially an e-mail system is what minors often use. Now many minors communicate with each other by using cellar phone. Of course, minors have opportunity to talk with friends in school, but the time is limited. If minors have cellar phone, they can communicate at home or on holidays. According to the research of ベネッセ corporation, 93% of minors said that the opportunity of communication with friends has increased by cell phone. In this way, you see, cell phones have been enriched our communication very much.
I will show you an example. If a minor has quarrel with friend and he feels it is difficult to apologize directly, he can apologize by sending e-mail. His friend can also receive and read it so calmly. Then they can make up a quarrel easily.
Like this, cell phones are very useful for minors to cultivate friendship.
We strongly believe that government should not rob minors of precious communication tool because government doesn't have right to restrict minors' freedom .
For these reasons, we strongly oppose this motion
01:50 永田
一回修正していた部分がきれいさっぱり消えていた永田です。くやしいので再アップします。
冒頭大幅な修正入ってますが、、、ごめんなさい。でもまんまだとうまくつながっていかない気がするんだよ～～う
Under the status quo, many minors have cellar phones. According to the research by Cabinet office, 96.4% (ninety-six point four) of Japanese minors have their own cellar phone. Judging from this, we can say that cellar phones are playing an important and irreplaceable(ちょっと仰々しい？？？essentialくらいでいいかな) role in minors’ daily life. So we strongly believe that today's plan will cause a really bad change for minors.
Our team stance is that minors should be informed of the correct way of using cell phones by education and it must lead to protecting them and enriching their life.
So I refute back to what previous speaker said under this stance.
（怖いのでいったんアップ）
Next, let me reconstruct our points. （ここしっかり話を切り替えてね!）
Our first point is about safety of minors.
As my partner said, more & more crimes and accidents involving minors are occurring under the status quo.(ここ頭でっかちだったのでちょっと後ろを重くしてみたよ)Children are very small and weak, and don’t have good insight into society because of lacking of experiment. So they can’t protect themselves as well as adults.
Nowadays(文頭nowはnow thatの意味にとられる危険があるので多用は避けた方がいいような。Ｓの後に入れたりするとこなれて聞こえるよ) many minors go to cram school（theいらない） or private lesson and practice in club activity, so they go home late（←追加） at night. It's dangerous situation because, as you know, few (fewですな。peopleは単純な可算名詞ではないけど不可算名詞でもなくて、常に複数扱いという奴なので) people walk on the street at night. So they should have cell phones and carry it because cell phones have very useful function to protect minors. It is GPS, the system calculating a person' location(場所確定ならこっちのがしっくりくる) by using satellite. So minors can locate themselves(おしゃれでしょ♪爆ｗ) and their parents can also find where they are. It leads to solving accidents and crimes. I have an evidence to support this point. (2:41)
（いったんアップ）
According to MSN industry and economic News, in March, 2008(two thousand eight), five elementary school students got lost in Mt.Tikuha, and（ここはbutじゃないと思う・・・・） by using GPS they could be(ここどうしたん？(笑)) rescued within about two hours and a half(おされに！ｗ).
This is how(のが、よい) GPS can rescue minors. Even if minors are kidnapped, GPS tells us where they are, and it leads to(would be, can beも可) early settlement (idiomみたい).
In addition, many cell phones(ここは勇気を持ってmanyって言っちゃおう。mostは８，９割ないと駄目だけどmanyは「無視できない多数」、つまり１割だってＯＫ) have crime prevention buzzer. If a child go home at night and is attacked by pervert(もう「怪しい人」じゃなくて変質者で行きましょう。), buzzer's big sound can repulse him.
（ここから先、しっかりＧＰＳと区別しないとエビの中にエビが入ってるみたいにきこえるよ）
And in addition to GPS, the function of calling is also useful to protect minors because they can ask help by calling. I have an evidence to support this point.
According to the Mainitci News paper, when 16 old girl was kidnapped at night, she asked her mother to help by calling and she was rescued safely. (3:01)
Like this, adding to its convinience, cell phone can protect minors.
（ここ以下のところ、上ではＧＰＳ機能＋通話機能で話を進めてたのにまとめがＧＰＳだけになっちゃってる。なのでどっちも併呑するような言い方に改めた方がよいのでは～～？ということで、以下）
We don’t have any other tool other than cellar phones which has such kind of various and helpful functions.
If we adapt the plan, it is clear that minors lose their safety. Government has responsibility to protect citizens' life. It is strange that government's plan breaks citizen's life. (3:12)
Our second point is about communication tool. (この一文な、「コミュニケーションツールについてです」っていうともうケータイの話じゃないみたいな印象を受ける。communicationにできんかな？)
As you know, cellar phones’ main function is calling and sending e-mails. Especially an e-mail system (ココ修正してるんで注意)is what minors often use. Now many minors communicate with each other by using cellar phone. Of course, minors have opportunity to talk with friends in school, but the time is limited. （次の文、but butになっててきつい。のでもう削除）If minors have cellar phone, they can communicate at home or on holidays(修正注意). According to the research of ベネッセ corporation, 93% of minors said that the opportunity of communication with friends has increased by cell phone(この文こまごま修正した、注意). From this, you can see that cell phones become additional communication tool now. (←これね。気持ちはすっごいわかるんだけどadditionalがヘンに浮いて見える。In this way, you see, cell phones have been enriched our communication very much. じゃだめかな？ )
I will show you an example. If a minor has quarrel with friend and he feels it is difficult to apologize directly, he can apologize by sending e-mail. The friend will notice（realizeは、脳内で「悟る」こと。五感で気づくときには使わない） the e-mail soon because most minors always have cellar phone under their hand. So they can make up a quarrel soon. （←この２文・・依存っぽくて危うくないかな？もうおもいっきり変えて、そうやって文字で受け取って見ることにより冷静に受け止められるとかにしたらどうかな？？His friend can also receive and read it so calmly. Then they can make up a quarrel easily.）
Like this, cell phones are very useful for minors to cultivate friendship.
We strongly believe that government should not rob minors of precious communication tool because government doesn't have right to restrict (他動詞sinの目的語は罪だぜ) minors' freedom .
For these reasons, we strongly oppose this motion
こ・・・こんなもん・・・・・？
00:51 tanaka
たびたびすみません、ちょっと手直ししたほうがいいかなあというポイント。
Now many minors have a cellar phone. According to the research by Cabinet office, 96.4% of Japanese minors have own cellar phone. Judging from this, you can see the fact that cellar phone has a big effect on minors. So we strongly believe that today's plan will cause a really bad change for minors.
So our team stance is that minors should understand the correct way of using cell phones by education and it leads to protecting them and enrich their life.
So I refute back to what previous speaker said under this stance.
Next, let me reconstruct our point.
Our first point is about safety of minors.
AS my partner said, now many crimes and accidents involving minors occur. Minors don't have enough knowledge of crime and accident（じゃあここを教育すればいいじゃないって言われそう(笑)もっと体力もないし経験が浅いからweakだというところを押したらどうかな。） and they can't protect themselves unlike（ではなくlikeじゃない？） adults. Now many minors go to the cram school or private lesson and practice in club activity, so they go home at night. It's dangerous situation because little （fewじゃない？）people walk on the street at night. So they should have own cell phone and carry it、（Because）Cell phone has very useful function to protect minors. The function(It) is GPS. GPS is (GPS isをけして,だけでもいい)the system calculating a person' position by using satellite. So minors can know（can know は組み合わせ的にちょっとおかしいのでcan find ぐらいがいいかと） where they are now and their parents can also know it. It leads to solving accidents and crimes. I have one evidence to support this point.
According to MSN industry and economic News, in March of 2008, five elementary students got lost in Mt.Tikuha, but by using GPS they can been rescued within about two hours and thirty minutes.
Like this, GPS can rescue minors. If minors are kidnapped, GPS tells us where they are, and it leads to(would be, can beも可) early solution.
In addition, there are some cell phones which have crime prevention buzzer. If minors go home at night and are attacked by suspicious person, buzzer's big sound can repulse him. And the function of calling is also useful to protect minors because they can ask help by calling. I have one（an, エビが一つしかないことを強調しているみたいなので） evidence to support this point.
According to the Mainitci News paper, when 16 old girl was kidnapped at night, she asked her mother to help by calling and she was rescued safely.
Like this, (adding to its convinience, cell phone can protect minors のほうが通じやすいと思う。気のせいかも＞＜)cell phones are convinient, moreover it protect minors. There are no goods （which are） used by ordinary people （ちょっと意味がよくわからない＞＜説明よろしく）and have GPS except cellar phone. If we adapt the plan, it is clear that minors lose their safety. Government has responsibility to protect citizens' lives . （soはいらないかな。というかこの次の分もなくてもいいかも） it is strange that government's plan breaks citizen's life.
Our second point is about communication tool.
As you know, cellar phone's main function is calling and sending e-mail. Especially e-mail is what minors often use. Now many minors communicate with each other by using cellar phone. Of course, minors have opportunity to talk with friends in school, but the communication time is limited. But if minors have cellar phone, they can communicate in house or in holiday. According to the research of ベネッセ corporation, 93% minors said that the oppotunity of communication with friends increased by cell phone. From this, you can know that cell phones become additional communication tool now.
I will show you an example. If a minor has quarrel with friend and minor feels it is difficult to apologize directly, he can apologize by sending e-mail. The friend will realize the e-mail soon because most minors always have cellar phone under their hand. So they can make up a quarrel soon.
Like this, cell phone is very useful for minors to cultivate friendship.
We strongly believe that government should not rob minors of precious communication tool because government doesn't have right to sin minors' freedom .
So from these reasons, we strongly oppose this motion
09.06.10 haruKa
指摘していただいたところなどを修正しました。
Now many minors have a cellar phone. According to the research by Cabinet office, 96.4% of Japanese minors have own cellar phone. Judging from this, you can see the fact that cellar phone has a big effect on minors. So we strongly believe that today's plan will cause a really bad change for minors.
So our team stance is that minors should understand the correct way of using cell phones by education and it leads to protecting them and enrich their life.
So I refute back to what previous speaker said under this stance.
Next, let me reconstruct our point.
Our first point is about safety of minors.
AS my partner said, now many crimes and accidents involving minors occur. Minors don't have enough knowledge of crime and accident and they can't protect themselves unlike adults. Now many minors go to the cram school or private lesson and practice in club activity, so they go home at night. It's dangerous situation because little people walk on the street at night. So they should have own cell phone and carry it. Cell phone has very useful function to protect minors. The function is GPS. GPS is the system calculating a person' position by using satellite. So minors can know where they are now and their parents can also know it. It leads to solving accidents and crimes. I have one evidence to support this point.
According to MSN industry and economic News, in March of 2008, five elementary students got lost in Mt.Tikuha, but by using GPS they can been rescued within about two hours and thirty minutes.
Like this, GPS can rescue minors. If minors are kidnapped, GPS tell us where they are, and it leads to early solution.
In addition, there are some cell phones which have crime prevention buzzer. If minors go home at night and are attacked by suspicious person, buzzer's big sound can repulse him. And the function of calling is also useful to protect minors because they can ask help by calling. I have one evidence to support this point.
According to the Mainitci News paper, when 16 old girl was kidnapped at night, she asked her mother to help by calling and she was rescued safey.
Like this, cell phones are convinient, moreover it protect minors. There are no goods which are used by ordinary people and have GPS except cellar phone. If we adapt the plan, it is clear that minors lose their safety. Government has responsibility to protect citizens' lives . So it is strange that government's plan breaks citizen's life.
Our second point is about communication tool.
As you know, cellar phone's main function is calling and sending e-mail. Especially e-mail is what minors often use. Now many minors communicate with each other by using cellar phone. Of course, minors have opportunity to talk with friends in school, but the communication time is limited. But if minors have cellar phone, they can communicate in house or in holiday. According to the research of ベネッセ corporation, 93% minors said that the oppotunity of communication with friends increased by cell phone. From this, you can know that cell phones become additional communication tool now.
I will show you an example. If a minor has quarrel with friend and minor feels it is difficult to apologize directly, he can apologize by sending e-mail. The friend will realize the e-mail soon because most minors always have cellar phone under their hand. So they can make up a quarrel soon.
Like this, cell phone is very useful for minors to cultivate friendship.
We strongly believe that government should not rob minors of precious communication tool because government doesn't have right to sin minors' freedom .
So from these reasons, we strongly oppose this motion
@nagata
＜はるかちゃんのメンバースピーチ＞
ここでいろいろ手を加えてはどうかい・・・。
Now many minors have a cellar phone. According to the research by Cabinet office, 96.4% of Japanese minors have own cellar phone. Judging from this, you can see the fact that cellar phone has a big effect on minors. So we strongly believe that today's plan will cause a really bad change bad for minors.
So our team stance is that minors should understand the correct way of using cell phones by education and it leads to protecting them and enrich their life. If government prohibits cellar phones, does it lead to solve all problems? As my partner said, a cellar phone has many advantages, so government should not take it away from minors but educate them in order to use cell phones correctly.
So I refute back to what previous speaker said in this stance.
next, let me reconstruct our point.
Our first point is about safety of minors.
Now many crimes and accidents involving minors occur. According to the police white paper of Japan, there are 1345(one thousand three hundred forty five) atrocious crimes and 15775(fifteen thousand seven hundred seventy five) violent crimes involving minors. Minors don't have enough knowledge of crime and accident and they can't protect themselves unlike adults. Now many minors go to the cram school or private lesson and practice in club activity, so they go home at night. ＜だから危ない、まできちっと入れたほうがいい？夜＞So they should have own cell phone and carry it. Cell phone has very useful function to protect minors. The function is GPS. GPS is the system calculating a person' position by using satellite. So minors can know where they are now and their parents can also know it. It leads to solving accidents and crimes. I have one evidence to support this point.
According to MSN industry and economic News, in March of 2008, five elementary students got lost in Mt.Tikuha, but by using GPS they can been rescued within about two hours and thirty minutes.
Like this, GPS can rescue minors. If minors are kidnapped, GPS tell us where they are, and it leads to early solution.
In addition, there are some cell phones which have crime prevention buzzer. If minors go home at night and are attacked by suspicious person, buzzer's big sound can repulse him. And the function of calling is （欠落）also useful to protect minors because they can ask help by calling.
Like this, cell phone has convenience (ここare very convenientじゃいかんかい？抽象名詞は扱いに気をつけて), moreover it protect minors. There are no goods which are used by ordinary people and have GPS except cellar phone. If we adapt the plan, it is clear that minors lose their safety. Government has responsibility to protect citizens' lives . So it is strange that government's plan breaks citizen's life.(？？ぶれいく？)
Our second point is about communication tool.
As you know, cellar phone's main function is calling and sending e-mail. Especially e-mail minors often use. Now many minors communication each other by using cellar phone. Of course, minors have opportunity to talk with friends in school, but the communication time is limited. But if minors have cellar phone, they can communicate in house or in holiday. According to the research of ベネッセ corporation, 93% minors said that the oppotunity of communication with friends increased by cell phone. So to cultivate friendship, minors use cell phone
I will show you an example. If a minor quarrels（ここぱっと聞くと「まいなークォレル」＝小さな争いごと，に聞こえるよ。（外国人にマイナー＝未成年は意外と通じない）チルドレンにかえたらどうかな？？） with friend and minor feels it is difficult to apologize directly, he can apologize by sending e-mail. The friend will realize the e-mail soon because most minors always have cellar phone under their hand.
Like this, cell phone is very useful for minors to cultivate friendship.
In addition, cell phone is useful for physically challenged minor's communication. For exsample, minors who can't lesson with their ear can communicate with friend or family by using e-mail of cellar phone. Cellar phone enables such minors to communicate by using words wherever and whenever they like.
We strongly believe that government should not rob minors of precious communication tool because government doesn't have right to sin minors freedom （？？minors' かな？）.
So from these reasons, we strongly oppose this motion
最終更新：2009年06月10日 03:52
